I mentioned that I've been reading Just Walk Across the Room by Bill Hybels. Chapter 6 challenges the reader to craft your conversion story into 100 words or less--a power-packed version that can be shared briefly in a conversation without requiring an intermission and popcorn.
Hybels details 4 ways testimonies often go wrong. They are 1) long-winded, 2) fuzzy, 3) full of religious jargon, 4) and often pious-sounding ("I'm now better than you.")
I've taken up the challenge. I've written up my own Jesus story with the above guidelines in mind. Hybels uses an economical 79 words. I've taken up 95--long-winded, I know. Please read and give me feedback/critique:
Relatively speaking. That sums up my life before I met Jesus. “Relatively speaking” I was pretty good. Relatively speaking my struggles and sin-battles were properly stowed away and the surface of my life was pretty clean.
When I met Jesus in January of 1990 he took away my “relatively speaking” life. He gave me a new standard—His life—and a new Power to take away my hidden garbage and help me live honestly and transparently. I stopped serving the religion of appearance and attendance—I began relating to a God who loved me inside and out.